Asia and America. The importance of getting even closer
Now more than ever it is of huge importance to the world that their two biggest economies (America and China) find agreements to work together against the current economic climate and global warming.
Opposite to the previous American U.S. administration, Barack Obama’s one has global warming high scored in their agenda; reason why Hillary Clinton is currently in a tour around Asia to address those issues.
Because these two countries account for more than 40% of the world’s green house gas emissions, I think it is their responsibility to start contributing solving the problem. Also if cooperation between these two occurred, it will be easier for other countries to take a more active role. However it is worth mentioning that other countries, which produced fewer emissions, have better strategies against global warming.
1 comment:
Hi Vlad,
Here are my comments about your work.
1. Opposite to the previous US admninstration does not sound so natural - a better way would be:
"Taking a different position from the previous administration"
2. You don't need 'one' here as you have said administration earlier in the sentence.
3. placed highly on the agenda rather than scored
4. on a tour - not in a tour
5. Don't start a sentence with because
6. contributing + to the problem (preposition)
7. However, (use a comma afterwards)
Well done your writing is good and you state your points clearly.
Jessie Teacher
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